I love the film noir quality of his internal thoughts that are reminisant of the 50’s style detective novels. This is a great ficlet. I have an idea for a sequel, but I’m going to sleep on it tonight to see if you sequel it, and to see if the my idea makes it through the night.
Thanks All @Krulltar – Please go ahead and SQL . My writing style must be of a sort that makes people want the next installment, but not want to write it themselves. I love to see other people’s spin on my stuff, so I encourage you to write your sequel. In fact, I won’t write a sequel out of protest until you do!
wow.. this story grabs your attention, and it makes you wonder why hes got a gun to his head. The child’s voice really makes the ending come together.. its a breathtaking finale.. please by all means, proceed
I could imagine this being a moving frame in a black and white comic. A gritty one, of course, with plenty of feeling and hardboiled coppiness. I like how you made him more vulnerable than what is the detective-story “status quo.”
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