I love this idea. I did a very similar thing about 13 years ago, and have the backstory started for another attempt sitting here on my pc. For some reason, this didn’t quite feel like a diary entry to me. It felt more like this person was writing a note to someone rather than simply putting their thoughts to page. It could just be me though. Sometimes I misinterpret things. I think you have a lot of good stuff in here though, and look forward to more.
Yeah, I think it might not be so much like a diary entry too… But I was also trying to write it in a way where it would seem that it was expected for someone to read later on. I wanted to give it a try even though I’ve never written one in my life… But thankyou for the constructive criticism though. I really appreciate it. And I’d like to read yours as well, whenever you posted it.
I liked the resigned melancholy to the whole thing. Sadly, most psych patients don’t write nearly as coherently as this, but really insane writing doesn’t make for a good story.
John Perkins
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