This line is awesome:
The voice was to busy with its parade of curses and threats to pay any attention to her.
Except it should read “too busy.”
Sequel soon, or risk Flute Loop’s demise being on your hands!

yes, please sequel soon, or I will also face Flute Loop’s demise.
sigh…
great writing though. Fantabulous. Wonderiferous, awefanaticowonderous.
Lol. And you’re doing fantastic with the whole suspense thing… I might not survive this afternoon…

yes yes sequel very soon.
yeah i agree wid dreamer