This was fun, and a good play on the photo. I enjoyed “this was a fact, as tests and polls in later years would prove.” Good stuff. Though I’d like to suggest that you add a blank line between paragraphs. Makes it much easier to read on screen.
I didn’t notice that you actually split the last sentence into the sequel. I think it would have been better if you edited something else out to not end the ficlet mid-sentence. Or taken that whole paragraph into the next one. I think each ficlet should stand on its own, even if it is a part of a greater overall story.
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