Your dialogue system in this is kind of interesting… What exactly are you trying to convey with the italics? I wonder what the significance of the time is?

Yeah, the dialogue is interestingly told. I’m also curious about the italics. It makes it seem as though those lines are heard only in his mind, whereas his own words come out within quotation marks.
I have a feeling the time’s significance will be of import as the series progresses.

Yeah, definitely getting the same feeling of importance from the glimpses of time. And the use of italics is an interesting choice if he’s using a conventional phone. Still, another solid piece to a solid story that you know I’m gonna read and rate 5 stars.

It took me a second to realize this was another flashback, but now that I know to expect them it makes it easier to figure out what’s going on.
I saw what you were getting at with the italics being the other end of the phone, but I’m with Ana. It felt like thoughts to me, rather than the lightning bolt dialog box you see in comics.
Still, very well done. A definite sense of tension building up here.
Oh, and bonus, this is my 1,024th comment.

By popular demand, I’ve edited out the italics in favor of quotation marks.

Thanks for the feedback, all!