Awesome. Looks like you’re back on track here.
I know that this is simply a consequence of first person, but it feels like you have a lot of “I verb” actions in here. Not a hell of a lot you can do about it, I guess, and not much different than “pronoun verb” actions. But it just felt a little stutter-y to me. Does that make sense or am I just being overly critical?
Re-reading it again, I see it less for some reason, and am unable to see a better method.

Heh, yeah. I know what you mean, JP. I rewrote this one several times, trying to get the feel of it just right…and also to get it into Nirvana once I got the mood right.
Wondering if anyone will catch the classical nod I gave in this one.
As usual, more’s coming. I’m kinda flyin’ blind on this, though.

Blah blah blah…good stuff…blah bingo bloopie bheh.

I’m tired of typing stuff like “Wow!” and “Super!” and “Holy shit that was awesome!”.

@Ben, LOL me too… so just let me ditto him here ;)
Actually I really enjoyed this one. The energy felt the same as the earlier pieces.