I don’t think I’m very good at this style, but I figured I’d give it a shot.

Actually, I think you did really well. This reads well, seemlessly even, and the story-line is interesting.

Great so far!

That was pretty good.

You can feel how nervous she is, and the laughing in the background completes her fear of sounding like an idiot.

Yeah, this was a great sequel! Sorry I didn’t comment earlier, I’ve been vacationing in Hawaii! Well, not really (I wish) but I have been vacationing. Anyway, good job, once again!

i wish i was on vacation