This was pretty good. A well done scene. Though Avril and Britney as “some of the greats?” What has our world come to?
You misspelled “months” in the fourth paragraph.

a few grammatic things i must pick at:
you’re missing alot of “s;
and in the fourth paragraph you had “u” instead of “you”.
otherwise i really like that you used a dialect, it certainly added to the story.=]
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Thanks for the comments, they were very helpful; I did change “months,” however, what do you mean by “s?