This has some very nice imagery in it. Love the playful nature that you’ve got going here.
However, you do switch into present tense a couple of times. Fix that up, and you’ll have a really nice piece.

Cool I learned my new favorite word: calescence. This was lyrical and it has absolutely stunning imagery.

Got a hint of imagination and lost youth, maybe? Or that’s must my read, perhaps.

This seems like it should be taken in a very deep and personal way, I really like it! nice job!

Thanks for the wonderful comments guys. :)

John: Thanks man! Followed your advice, fixed the tenses. :) I wrote this at 1am, so you can just imagine how groggy I was.

Ana: It’s such a nice word. :) Thanks for the wonderful comment!

THX : Lost youth perhaps. Am currently being drowned in academic work, aka school. :( writing this was my escape.

Flute Loop: Thank you very much! :) I tried my best just to write continuously to keep it somewhat personal and conversational.