This is kind of confusing. Mainly because of this line: “I would have been disowned if I didn’t marry your fucktard ass when I got pregnant?” She’s talking to her dad, whom she married, who ended up cheating on her? I like a lot of this, but the confusion really makes it difficult to follow. The last couple of lines though, are awesome.
I agree with John, this is quite confusing. In the first story, the guy talked about male modeling, and suddenly in this one the guy is a girl? Or do I have it wrong? But I did like the other lines that didn’t have to do with the whole pregnant thing; I could understand those a whole lot better : )
The narrator is talking to you (ie her husband). I changed “I would have been disowned if I didn’t marry ” to “he would have disowned me if I didn’t marry”. Hopefully that clears it up a bit. @ Jamie Rose…this is more of a continuation of a theme rather than a sequel.
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