Wow, that was dark and unsettling, like a fever dream, full of unexpected turns and things that don’t quite fit. Very neat take on the challenge with some great lines and impressive vocab.

What an ending. I’m still in shock. Both your story and THX ’s have made me wary of taking trains.

Ha!! that was awesome!!!
I love shock-value in a short fic!
Good stuff..

Ha!! that was awesome!!!
I love shock-value in a short fic!
Good stuff..

gah.. sorry for the double post.

The goofy old woman was great! Her seemingly prophetic ramblings were ominous and proved to be deadly. It was shocking, but silly in a way. Unreal, like a dream. Thanks for entering!

Horrible timing to lose your luck.

From now on, I’m going to take care not to sit by funny-looking people…