Technically still one sentence as it’s just enumerating what’s on the paper?

technically :) I like it! Though it doesn’t reveal much… at least we know for sure the girl and the serum are tied together.

I love that the slip of paper is burnt so badly the message can’t be completely deciphered. We’re heightening the mystery yet again!

good i like the way u made pieces be riped out and burned

ya i like how you cant read what it says

great bit of mystery!

The mystery of the name at the end interests me the most.

Great way to add to the excitement.

The mystery of the name at the end interests me the most.

Great way to add to the excitement.

The mystery of the name at the end interests me the most.

Great way to add to the excitement.