wow this is really beautiful and unexpected,at least from you-no offense just you know faced with diabolical villainy you turn out this epic evocative paen to mortality- no matter how well i know you , you still have a few tricks stashed up your sleeves (and elsewheres i’d bet)

really deep, man! The villain is in the title, though the villainy is left to the imagination.

hey g2 whenever i enter your challenges you dont read them…wait you do read them you just dont make fun of them, which is just as bad…just needlin ya..g2 l wont kill you as fast next time but at least you got in the headline lololol nice challenge

Hey! I do read your entries! Would you rather I do that, or make fun of them into the middle of next Tuesday? Take your pick, I’m in no hurry. ;-)
This is just beautiful, leaving the villainy to one’s pondering. Thanks for entering!

just messin wit ya Gangsta2

Beautifully written. The villain seems to be the doctors?

This is shocking all the way around. And I say this because a) didn’t expect a poem from you ;D and b) I actually understood the whole thing. I know I say this over and over but, I don’t read poetry because I just “don’t get it.” I have an idea of the villain, then again I am torn between a “them” and an “it.” ;)

Wow, I love this. The description, the characters, and actions. It is really great. =)

This is awesome dude!! man oh man.. just when i thought you were full of whimsical craziness mixed with awesomeness – you pull something like this out of your A$$!!!
absolutely stupendous, man!! I really loved it.

i feel like sally fields from this little poem.lol

Not sure how I missed reading this already, but this is freakin’ awesome and really deep! A complete stroke of genius worth more than 5 stars, but that’s all I can give.

Anyway, It reminded me of the Metallica’s One . Also, I think everyone assumes that the victim is American or British, but the pass the Soma gives away that it’s an Iraqi. so the real villian here could be an American Soldier.

Not sure how I missed reading this already, but this is freakin’ awesome and really deep! A complete stroke of genius worth more than 5 stars, but that’s all I can give.

Anyway, It reminded me of the Metallica’s One . Also, I think everyone assumes that the victim is American or British, but the pass the Soma gives away that it’s an Iraqi. so the real villian here could be an American Soldier.

you know how decarte has the problem of other minds like you cant prove your arent god, i sometimes wonder if krulltar isnt really god…..

um…thanks

There is something very Sylvia Plath about this, both in the imagery and the tone (this is a compliment – Plath is one of my favorites). I’m not used to this style of writing from you, Mighty-Joe. This was a pleasant surprise, and if I could give you more than five stars, I would.

There is something very Sylvia Plath about this, both in the imagery and the tone (this is a compliment – Plath is one of my favorites). I’m not used to this style of writing from you, Mighty-Joe. This was a pleasant surprise, and if I could give you more than five stars, I would.

It’s awesome how there could be so many villains, and it touches lots of people with it’s message.

Very, very good.