Very strange! I love it!
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That first paragraph needs to go. It’s very awkard. You need to tighten up your sentences. Your tale is ok. It’s the mechanics that need work.

Um, yeah. I guess I won’t make this my first time being rude on Ficlets … so Thanks whatever for your advice, Wyatt. I’ll see what I can do.

And some advice for you, Wyatt. Read it from the beginning and then write me a note on advice, if ya like. http://ficlets.com/stories/35384#review-74131

Sorry. I’m in a pissy mood already.

I think your mechanics are fine.

And where on earth did Trey take her?

Okay, I’ll read on. Trying to figure out why Trey would lead her down an alley to meet some guy… Strange is right.

Okay, I’ll read on. Trying to figure out why Trey would lead her down an alley to meet some guy… Strange is right.

Oh. Lets see what happens next.
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