Really neat story idea with the dual bits, and I kind of get the past tense/present tense trick. I didn’t quite follow the blanket sentence, though I still got the tone and emotion that was supposed to come across (I think).
Yeah, I really am impressed with how well you’ve done the reality vs. coma world interplay. Very nicely done. Here’s to hoping you get a sequel sometime soon! I’m loving this series.
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