Nice description, but where is the story going? There’s no hook here, no reason to care about Johanna. When you are writing a small piece u have to add as much color as possible. Good luck

Nice description, but where is the story going? There’s no hook here, no reason to care about Johanna. When you are writing a small piece u have to add as much color as possible. Good luck

Thanks i appreciate the advice, but i was hoping someone out there would know where its going, i just wanted it to be vague enough to have it go whichever way wanted.