This was funny. Keep writing! (Maybe pay more attention to punctuation next time)

Hummm, you need to read Romeo and Juliet.

ok amber first change you pic that is krulltars pic
@mass that is wyatts pic why you rippin him off
ok and amber there was some punctuation but that isnt what made this story ‘not that good’ it is because you didnt give of yourself. It lacked emotional content. Writers write because if the didnt they would die like breathing. Writers bleed,jokes,dreams, fantasies,lies,tales, not just words. get a pic
and remember emotional content.

Amber
Ok, I love the whole forbidden love thing. But he is right. We need to really get that sense of heartache, and a desperate need of what she wants. And how she really just needs Ben.