Nice form, but not much of a hook, and we know very little about these people.

Actually, he has other stories about these people… Interesting that her sight is back. Would be also interesting to know why. Maybe you could tag them together, using Sara’s name? (I forget his…) I like it, but I like seeing them again. :)

Aaaaah, so many stories, so little time.

Aaaaah, so many stories, so little time.

Aaaaah, so many stories, so little time.