Very good. Enough of a hook to make the reader want more. Also very descriptive. Good Job.

I’m intrigued. I hope you continue this.

Oh, and you missed a period in the fourth paragraph. Great job, though!
LoA

Ah, thanks! I corrected it. :)

This is very intersting, and the descriptions are fantastic.
You can almost feel it[:

I really liked your description of the situation. Hope you don’t hate my sequel.

hmm, this male seems shady.. and those pills speak of danger too. A very cryptic piece!

fastest way to get hep c take of your shoes in the club lol

I agree with Mistress Elsha Hawk. Reading on :]