Your profile says hold back the bricks, but then it also says you want to polish off your writing skills. You’ll polish faster if people don’t pull their punches, so long as they’re polite about it, than if they just tell you how great you are. Here’s my polite punch: study up on your homonyms. Here are 3 spots where you used the wrong one of a pair of words that sound alike: “There teams” should be “their teams”, “are lives” should be “our lives”, and “all threw” should be “all through”.
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