I like this. It is very poetic and a very thoughtful creation. Kudos, good work!

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I agree. Very poetic.

I like how you seem to make it so easy to connect with the character’s feelings. I like that.

Very interesting. I’m intrigued, and I can definitely see this being a series…
LoA

I really liked this! The line sank into the pavement especially intrigues me. You write very well.

I agree with above. Took me a while to find a favorite line and I really just like the whole thing. Well, especially the last line. “Everything is alright,â€? I whispered. So much feeling and tone, great job :]

sigh I know what it’s like to lie to yourself or try to make things seem better than they are….