This is a really interesting series you’ve started here but there are a few things. It gets kinda redundant like…”They got up and started to fly to a tree on a plateau half a mile away. In the middle of the plateau, there was a big, thick tree…” and “There was chain marks all over the tree caused by metal chains…” you might want to look over those parts and reword them so the story flows better. Besides that good job!

Oh and I don’t think this one or the prequel necessarily deserve the mature rating. I might be wrong but I don’t see anything that really requires it, especially in this part.

I’ll have to agree with penguincaptain18, this ficlet needs to be tightened up to run smooth.