I don’t know about this. See, for my creative writing class we had to write a poem about a hidden problem or something.
I’m practicing my poetry right now but I don’t like how this turned out. Its weird so I didn’t turn it in.
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I like the poem. The structure is really cool. I like the spaces and how you broke up some of the lines. You should take it to your teacher and see what they think.