hey i wrote this idk if you would consider it mature. if you do and i offended you i apologize

Its not really offensive but I suggest you break stuff up into litte paragraphs.
[Sorry, I ALWAYS comment like crazy :]

i like how you made the angels ugly. quite a twist on things i must say.

there are a few spelling glitches (but i do those too.) and i think brake should be break?

Overall nice work.