Comments on Dark's Fantasy Challenge( A Promise, A Knight and a Dead Dragon) by Kermitgorf

Mistress Elsha Hawk

ouch, get Sir Goodheart a medic! The clapping of the crowd has a theatrical feel.. very typical characters and ending for a fantasy, stereotypically written. :P
- Posted 2009-01-12 05:34:45.
Blusparrow

That is a really good fantasy story! You can even picture it happening in your head!
LoA
- Posted 2009-01-12 05:34:45.
Kermitgorf

Yeah I told my nephew that fantasy wasn’t my forte
- Posted 2009-01-12 05:34:45.
chakatreatmentson!(LoA)

It is THE Archetype of a dragon story, with a little Evel Knevel thrown in… I very much enjoyed it, perfectly appropriate for big gold letters, illustrations and bedtimes
- Posted 2009-01-12 05:34:45.
BernerOberland

Wow, kept my interest.. neat dragon.
- Posted 2009-01-12 05:34:45.
M.Paul Regret

I think you did a great job on the fantasy/action element of a fairy tale story, awesome Dragon and typical Beowulf type Hero.. cliched yes.. but well done in it’s genre.
- Posted 2009-01-12 05:34:45.
THX 0477

Very much in the fantasy mold. Wasn’t Goodheart one of the Care Bears, or one of the Care Bear Cousins? Heehee, good of you to take a stab outside your usual forte.
5th paragraph starts with a fragment, just to be nitpicky.
- Posted 2009-01-12 05:34:46.
DARK!

You almost copied beowolf :(
- Posted 2009-01-12 05:34:46.