I hate “It was a dark and stormy night.” No idea why, but I do. I also hate it when people try to play with it because… well, it’s overdone, isn’t it? Nevertheless, tonight I found myself wanting to do something with it. I can only apologise :)

No apology needed.. wonderful setting and descriptions espfirst paragraph>>The sun shone in the sky like a heatlamp in a snake enclosure, beating down on the city

Love the contrast between what should be and what is. Nice job.
LoA