whoa! dramatic! will the drugs kill him? does doug live? why did it take 20 minutes for him to drink the water….lol

I didn’t intend it to read like she was drinking a 20 minute glass of water it’s just 20 minutes later cuz that’s the rule of the challenge—there are prequel possibilities with this challenge. There’s no clear cut gender distinction for the main character either, but as the challenge goes it’s a female because I’m male. I guess it takes some reading into.

Amazing job on this.
I could see it as a series.

Dang, that is intense. There is definately sequel potential here. Beautifully written.

Amazingly descriptive – the lake metaphor was nearly gothic, I think. And I like the turn of phrase “perverted eyes”. I don’t know why I like it so much, but I’ve gone back to read it several times now.

And you wrote this with completely clean language! I know (speaking as female-type person) in my own head I would have been cursing Doug up one side and down the other… grin.

I had no trouble recognizing her as female. Nor did I have a problem with the water. She probably drank a spiked glass of water and it took that long to kick in. Very nice job.

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Amazing detailed descriptions going on here! Perfect!