I assume the POV on this ficlet is male? Reading your last ficlet then into this one was is a little confusing on POV

Thanks, Wyatt, I’ll try and fix that…

okay – i think I fixed it without making it too awkward to read.

I know, picky picky. Only one more suggestion. First sentence might make it clearer if you wrote: I hate Abby, all of us men do.

You’re right, Wyatt; that reads much better. Had to change one more “they” to “we”, but it works now. Thanks for the feedback!

I like it so far. But.
It is, oh how can I put this…beating around the bush-like? I guess you could say that.
Other than that, it’s pretty good.