Very interesting. You certainly have my attention, it’s begging for a sequel. Keep it going! (or someone else jump on)
It gives just enough story to allow the reader to imagine the scene, but you hold back just enough details to keep us tantalized and wanting more. I’m a sucker for great closing lines, and that’s one heck of a closer.
I agree with the above. Very well written and amazing job :]
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♠Ana Cristina♥
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