F.Y.I. a hoopty is a beater is a raggedy car…

Very nice. I had to read it twice to really understand it. But I like your style. Very Elmore Leonard like.

The dialogue was awesome!! Great story..
5.53845903857029384502394857 stars!

ok.. i’ll round up to 6 stars…

lol, your dialogue rocks! and I think the car should burp, wisps of smoke from the trunk, after it eats the people.

you know, I think it probably did…

I was finally able to sign in, now I can read your story! gimme a sec…

wow. You have a distinct style, and a strong stroke with the paint brush of description. This is complicated brilliance. Proper slang and vernacular really made the dialogue work. I could hear your characters voices. Terrific.

I completely agree with Tad Winslow, this was amazing because it all fit together perfectly. 5 stars.

I know that song you quoted in your profile—Mobb Deep, shook ones part II. Completely awesome. Folks, we have a hip hop junky on our hands, alert the authorities.