Holy crap…this is a really eerie beginning,,,Who are they? Spirits, ghosts, aliens , a virus….so many possibilities. I can’t wait to see more of this.

I couldn’t help myself, had to write a sequel.

wow! It is really eerie. Awesome job!
LoA

I agree with the above. Chills-down-your-spine thin. I like it!

seems to me the person hears voices… :) very nicely described!

Whoa, reminds me a little of The Host, an invader in your body, in your head. But definitely scarier!