okay now that’s a better picture of them understanding one another, but simply stating that they made the same wish from Essie’s POV isn’t really enough to make me believe it.
I need an eye-to-eye moment, a set up situation where they’ve both thought the same thing, and the reader thinks it too, because you’ve hinted at it up to that point. Then I would feel that their relationship is strong.
Mistress Elsha Hawk
Mistress Elsha Hawk