This has a poetic message that anyone can relate to. It’s great that your using ‘on the morrow’, ‘shall’ and the like :)
my only suggestion would be to remember to be consistent with your language throughout your poem. Try not to switch from older to modern speech unless it’s specifically called for : )

ditto above.
I didn’t feel that this was quite as good as your ‘Dove’ pieces, but still good and definately relatable.