this is really interesting! This could go on for quite some time, it would be cool to learn what happened to kill the population, why only a few could survive, and such.

Also, that was really adorable at the end. =)

the only critique I have for this is that Tanner’s dialogue seems a bit stiff and formal, but that may just be his character…

Thanks for the feedback!

In the prequel I was trying to convey that everyone died because the Earth exploded and there were only a few thousand spaceships to escape in, most only big enough for a few people. I guess that still doesn’t explain why. I’m more interested in how they cope with their new situation.

I changed Tanner’s dialogue a little. Did that help? How do I make it less stiff? It’s supposed to sound resigned and depressed.

(sorry it took so long to get back to you!)

ahh, that makes sense. But yeah, I agree, seeing the reaction is more interesting, the cause just adds a bit more depth to it, I guess. (Did they cause the accident, or were they just lucky? that sort of deal.)

yeah, this sounds a lot better, and I get what you were going for.