So yeah, my first attempt at poetry. What do you all think?

your first?!!! this is sad. everyone should at least right one though and I am glad you are. I like it mucho!

Lovely first outing into poetry. Has a very straight-forward, stream of consciousness feel to it.

wow! this is an amazing first poem, as well as an amazing poem period. you conveyed the emotion so well. it’s sad, yet inspirational. is this based on real life?

Actually yes it is. blushes most poems of mine are based on my life.