Just the sense of peril hanging over this makes for a good story. Well done.

Ehh… it was good, but it’s very awkward usually in a story where the villian is not so guilty that you come in in the middle of something. It was like i never knew this guys motive for anything or even what else he could do. Buuuuuuuuuut, it was very original and well written. *

I was almost confused, but I stayed focused and actually got it. ;) Good job.

ummm, i think X-ninja didnt really understand ur point… i dont either cuz its way over my head but i think this is good… even tho i would hav liked to see him kill his daughters…

haha yes i am the devil.

Ah, the Dark Passenger. Very Stephen King-esque, in a good way.

i liked it a lot, nice vocabulary use haha and really good ideas put in.

kinda scary that he’s a murderer AND a dad though.. kinda like Mr. Murder hehe but different at the same time.

i liked it a lot, nice vocabulary use haha and really good ideas put in.

kinda scary that he’s a murderer AND a dad though.. kinda like Mr. Murder hehe but different at the same time.

BAH ! sorry about the two comments!!!

ummm, i think X-ninja didnt really understand ur point… i dont either cuz its way over my head but i think this is good… even tho i would hav liked to see him kill his daughters…

haha yes i am the devil.

I’m not sure I understand this. It’s well written, but it doesn’t seem very scary… at least to me.

the problem with serial killers is that they can look and act so normal. nice work NM.