Glad i didn’t have a sister. A younger bro was bad enough, but at least i could punch him back.

If this ficlet was in the middle of a story it would have been fine, but to me, as a beginning it was a bit confusing. I feel you didn’t set up the scene as well as you could. ie, we didn’t know what he was doing until the third paragraph and even then, was he inside or out. I know, nit-picky, but my assessment.

I still have about 100 characters left so I could definately try to implement some sort of setting. Good feedback, thanks.

I’ll have to figure out why his sister isn’t in school too. Maybe she’s on a field trip lol.

Cool use of the present tense, and I loved the description of jumping off her patience into anger. Great stuff. And it does jump in mid-story, but I think that’s a ficlets thing…otherwise every ficlet is a beginning, and nobody gets to write a middle or an end.

hmm, Mom isn’t home, and the sister is telling the brother to go to school, maybe mom leaves early for work and they are waiting for the bus… this discussion could take place in the span of two minutes…

Bah, this little sister sounds annoying. she over reacted, like most girls do. though that would be the kettle calling the pot black considering im a girl…hmm..anyway

this reads like it needs a sequal. and i do agree with Wyatt Aapr, so it may need a prequel too. i want to know what “fool” he was “telling off” and why he had to hot foot it out of there. dun dun dun

hahahaha reminds me of some pompous jerk