Yeah, I know the ending is a bit, well, uncreative, but other than that, what do you think?

HAH !
It is very obvious you and I saw the story in very different ways. I REALLY liked this though. This one was a little confusing in the middel, but i liked the last line. This is the first i have written in days, and i plan to continue my line of this story. GRRReat job!

This is pretty cool.

i really like this.

thnx for the comments, but i have one question. Mr.Peck, why are you imitating Tony the Tiger (GRReat!) from the cereal, you know Frosted Flakes? (No offense, just a harmless joke)

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