haha nice. i love how u (and teddy i guess)made it sound like Ty wasn’t interested in Lindsey but then it was clear again that he was interested in her. great waiy to add the suspense. i think tho that like, you could have put more details and such into the story. but that is something that you can work on. but otherwise good job!!

I probably will rewrite all these like 4 myself adding detail and stuff like that.

um, consult a grammar expert if u can.

way to be rude, 4407; its a great story

It is a cute story, but it does need grammar help.

very stream of consciousness

i liked the story good job!