thats pretty smart. i have never thought of writing like that. and, wat fyora said about ur editing needing a lot of work, i don’t know what she means by that, but i think you did a good job. the only other thing i have to say about this is u could have put alot more into the story. like more knowledge. but thats just me. and if u’v seen or read my work, then u realize im no expert.
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