I think you should introduce the speaking character earlier. And this doesn’t sound like a typical boy – noticing things like eyeliner, for instance. Also that Scott let Adam go on for so long is a bit atypical.
I do really like the end sentence.

haha yes i agree with you Alexa. I just couldn’t think of another way to introduce what guys thought of Eva. For now on I’ll try to keep him thinking like a guy :)