Nathaniel – I will change the name. I’m not really into Half-Life, just picked a name. I will use a name generator and see what that comes up with. I generally don’t spend much time on character names.
The first ficlet I’ve read that looks worthy to be in print. I love the idea of a detective with an impeccable hunch. StrugglingWriter, in my mind you’re already a success. Keep writing – I’ll be watching for more!
I like the gift idea. The beginning is a bit ordinary. Perhaps talking about the gift in a flashback first somehow, then the murder. The gift is the point. Would love to read more.
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Susan Holder is terrific
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