Um…I declare this “poem”: too depressing, too abstract, and too weird.

If you couldn’t figure it out, the story is centered around the illness of anorexia nervosa and my own extremely unknowledgeable interpretation of its effect on people.

So….any thoughts? And did I break any rules for the challenge? I dunno if I had the right idea…

I could figure it out, and I thought it fit the psychosis of the disorder quite well (in my unprofessional opinion). It makes a great poem, too.

Thanks =) Yeah, I was hoping the mindset of the disorder seemed right.

I like the rewrite even better. Keep up the good work.

Chilling, disturbing, unpleasant…and very well handled. I don’t have any experience of eating disorders, but that looks incredibly convincing and makes me immensely glad I don’t have that experience!

One more thing – long chunks of blank verse are incredibly hard to pull off without looking pretentious. You managed it superbly. Great work!