Nice. I like what you’ve done here.

Interesting. I think I’m a little confused, but it wouldn’t be a mystery if I wasn’t.

Ditto what THX said. The style has drawn me in, though.

i’m glad yas liked the style. i tried to prequel the story by adding mystery. a lil complicated I know, byt most mysteries are.

Ooo fascinating. You should definitely write more of this, I’m lovin’ it. (I’m a huge fan of Law and Order, and this is almost like reading a discovery scene.) Great stuff!