Hmm, somehow I got the idea the people were under the water, but now I don’t think they are, which makes way more sense. Now we just have to figure out just what is under the water, huh.

Very interested to see where you plan on going with this.

I like the mood this sets, and I love that you’re putting the breaks between paragraphs. It makes a huge difference.

hmm who’s this girl?
very mysterious =]

yea who is the girl and where is he going excatly ?!?1