Ending was funny. pizza box whales ?? funny line, but I dont know what it means lol

It does sound like a great party.

_{I love this: “Jokes were made. Innuendoes were butchered. Crass comments flew like rice at a wedding.”}

and: “Cleaning up is for suckers or hired help”, which is so true!

never been to a party like that, lol

detritus
good word

wow. ending is kind of creepy.

oh i love it

so funny and completely true
[from what ive heard]

i second alexa’s comment
the rice line was the BEST !

It’s hilarious. And I loved the sea of cans and bottles/ pizza box whales metaphor.
And I have to like the crass comments line (even if it reminds me of the guys in my English class.)

i lOVED the sea/whales metaphor!!!!! and the crass comments line! however, didn’t really understand what the meaning of him being dead means.

Wow, I really like all these positive comments, especially since it took me so darn long to get around to doing this challenge cause I was so stuck for an idea.
And to answer Blueyedwonder, the idea behind him being dead was that everyone is leaving and thanking him like they care, but he’s dead.

I third Alexa’s comment. Those were great!

awesome you made the Featured Ficlet with one of your Best ficlets. Great aprty, great ficlet.

This is really good and I quite enjoyed it! I’m interested to see where it goes.

Party on, dudes! Rockin’! Nice feature ficlet!

Congrats! You’re the Featured Ficlet!

Oh man, you were there, too?

I’m in love with this. I’ve read the last paragraph over and over again. You could not have worded it more perfectly.

The perfect ficlet-pithy, witty, and funny.

Funneh… well written, good job.

Excellent work!
This piece really sums up the fakeness of high school and for many who still haven’t grown up college, too. If people could only self reflect every day and really learn from their experiences….

Oh, and about your about the author post, you must have just read the allagory of the cave. :)

I’ve been to slammin’ parties like this, but no one ever died. I’d like to see where this is going…

Wow, thanks for all the nice comments. Gee, I’d like to see where this is going too! Cause I have no idea.

Okay, lets start with:

And to answer Blueyedwonder, the idea behind him being dead was that everyone is leaving and thanking him like they care, but he’s dead.

Wtf does that mean? Is he actually dead, dead asleep? Thanking him like they care, people normally thank the host for letting them basically thrash his place.

BTW , are you in high school? Good write but it seems like you are practicing. Plus you use big words but you need to learn how to spell them or you look like an idiot instead smart.

Yay party!! I like how Malcom was dead

I dont think that this was intended to be humorous, forgive me if I’m wrong, but the words you have selected make the overall tone very negative. I think you did a pretty good job though…

WTF ??? This shit didn’t make sense. I clicked on the lick thinking it would tell me how to throw a good party, after all it was under news stories with a picture of a real party. VERY DISAPPOINTED :[

whoa. confused. too kme like 5 tries to read it and figure out what actually happend. creepy at end. i was like what…dead? huh? red faced ,man killed him. i predict.

You are an excellent author, please comment upon my sequal. (its not much but i wrote it in like five minutes… lol)

The unregistered users who have reviewed this piece in the past 12 hours are morons. Ditto for the people who still dont get it even after the clarifications. These are the people who read Lord of the Flies and go, huh?

The pizza box metaphor was perfect. Also, I think this works best as a short little story all on its own. To extend the story would be to tarnish what you just put together. Like what, are we going to chronicle the walk home? The clean up? im getting cut short..haha, ficlet nirvana

I really liked this one, but the bad comments only enhance the good ones and shows who has taste and who doesn’t.
This doen’t seem like a high school piece
It does make sence
It was not a negative vibe
and if you want to know how to throw a good party ask google!

Great piece of work. Clever, amusing, and interesting.
(I did want you to know that I sequeled BfE’s awful piece, not out of disrespect to you, but out of respect for how amazingly bad BfE’s piece was – the bad of an Uwe Boll or Ed Wood movie. Brilliantly, cluelessly, inept.)
Keep up the good work!

i loved that story dude !!!
so true !!!

- shi