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They Used To Play "Hide And Seek" Together...[Lyric Challenge]

“That you only meant well? That’s it all for the best? And you decided this?” came her shrill yell from the other room.
He shuffled on the spot nervously.
“You don’t care a bit,” she whispered. “You don’t care a bit.” He heard her begin to cry. He hated hearing his mother cry.
“What the hell is going on?” his father yelled again. At her. To her. Because of her.
“No, you don’t care a bit.” He could hear the contempt in her voice. The hate that was spilling out after years of neglect. The neglect that he’d had to witness and bear the weight of.
“The dust has only just begun to fall,” she spat at him again as she grabbed her bag. The little boy closed his eyes; held his hands against his ears. “You won’t catch me around here.”
The little boy watched as his mother walked down the hall.
“I don’t believe you.” His father said. A moment passed. She didn’t turn around. “I DON ’T BELIEVE YOU !”
He watched his father break down. The tears that splatted against the linoleum.
“All those years…this can’t be happening.”

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They Used To Play "Hide And Seek" Together...[Lyric Challenge]
THX 0477
Posted 11 months ago

All the statements from song lyrics? It all fits pretty well with the overheard argument theme.
They Used To Play "Hide And Seek" Together...[Lyric Challenge]
artistsrunwild
Posted 11 months ago

All speech from – “Hide and Seek” by Imogen Heap

I was supposed to put that when I first posted it lol…but i had some issues with this…so I’m putting it up now!
They Used To Play "Hide And Seek" Together...[Lyric Challenge]
Ana Cristina
Posted 11 months ago

Nicely written. It’s very emotionally charged. Good job.
They Used To Play "Hide And Seek" Together...[Lyric Challenge]
One Time, One Chance
Posted 11 months ago

nice job =]
luvv how u weaved [?] the song in with the whole thing =]
They Used To Play "Hide And Seek" Together...[Lyric Challenge]
someday_93
Posted 11 months ago

I love it! I’ve never heard the song but it’s cool that you used the lyrics for all the talking.
They Used To Play "Hide And Seek" Together...[Lyric Challenge]
[pens&feathers]
Posted 11 months ago

Wow. You really capture the emotion in this. Very well done.
They Used To Play "Hide And Seek" Together...[Lyric Challenge]
Alexa ♥
Posted 11 months ago

Very sad. I now have to look into Imogen Heap & of course, Hide & Seek.
They Used To Play "Hide And Seek" Together...[Lyric Challenge]
SKermitgorf
Posted 11 months ago

congrats on being 2nd in the challenge!
domestic squabble, emotional.