Ficlets

Sign In | Blog | Help

Comments

Average Reader Rating:

1. He's Sick Of Spray-On Pants

   artistsrunwild

   Posted 11 months ago

   “Spray-On Pants” – Kisschasy [A highly recommended Aussie Band]

2. He's Sick Of Spray-On Pants

   SKermitgorf

   Posted 11 months ago

   

   sounds like a sight to be seen…
   A skinny girl in too-tight jeans stumbled over to him and stuck her tongue down his throat. He humoured her for a while until she realised he was someone else. Horrified, he left her to gyrate to the music and sought shelter in the lounge area of the club. It was a sight to be seen. that whole paragraph is awesome!

3. He's Sick Of Spray-On Pants

   Saint Chuck

   Posted 11 months ago

   

   I agree, that one paragraph makes the story.

4. He's Sick Of Spray-On Pants

   JonasBrothersLova148

   Posted 11 months ago

   Love the ending!!!!!!!! ♥♥

5. He's Sick Of Spray-On Pants

   artistsrunwild

   Posted 11 months ago

   oh im SOO glad that middle paragraph worked out….I edited it upwards of 4 times to make it just right and im glad it paid off! :)
   thank you everyone

6. He's Sick Of Spray-On Pants

   FourSeven

   Posted 11 months ago

   

   He wanted to be a struggling artist who did anything for their creative lifestyle. He wanted to live for something, not just cigarettes and bad beer.
   _
   hehe, interestingly stated. i dont know about everybody else, but struggling writers have a habit of picking up drug addictions or suffering complete mental or emotional breakdowns. Cigs and bad beer tend to be a mainstay in the lives of us never-will-be’s. This guy’s got a rough path ahead of him. Good little ficlet, again.

7. He's Sick Of Spray-On Pants

   Mycroft

   Posted 11 months ago

   

   It was pretty much guaranteed that I was going to love this as soon as I saw the title…also, it’s written very well. It gets the bleakness of this guy’s life across very well without ever stating it openly – great example of “show, don’t tell”.

8. He's Sick Of Spray-On Pants

   someday_93

   Posted 11 months ago

   

   This is great! I love how you use song lyrics for these.

Want to comment on this ficlet? You need to sign in!

Inspired by

• The bicycles inside your skull send you away and off you go.
  “Are you even listening to me?”
  She turned; she’d been thinkin…

  A sequel to Not Yet A Bright And Free Brick

This story's tags

cliche, club, dance, dancing, groups, her, him, kisschasy, lyrics, meeting, party, relationship, song, spray-on pants, teenage