The outcome of divorce part two

by Blondie Babe

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(you have to read the first part to get it) I’ve gotten every thing a girl could want but i guess you could say i’m not your average girl because all i wanted was to sit down with my mom and dad for a dinner. I wouldn’t even care if I ate at McDonalds! i just wanted my family back. My bags were getting heavy and i didn’t no what to do. One day my friend and I went to church (my mom dropped us off) and someone told me it was ok to give all of my bags to the lord. it was hard at first but finally i let go of my last bag. So i let my life control me for almost 10 years. All of my bags controlled me when all I had to do was let them go. So let your bags go, its not that hard. trust me…........☻

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Average Reader Rating: 1.5 stars out of 5

  1. The outcome of divorce part two

    One Time, One Chance's Buddy Icon One Time, One Chance

    Posted 10 months ago

    aww! yeah BB! tht must’ve been hard to do, but u did it!!! =]

  2. The outcome of divorce part two

    Ben Paddon's Buddy Icon Ben Paddon

    Posted 10 months ago

    1.0 out of 5 stars

    This is, in fact, dire.

  3. The outcome of divorce part two

    dewinduvae's Buddy Icon dewinduvae

    Posted 10 months ago

    2.0 out of 5 stars

    Why didn’t you make this a sequel of nr 1?
    Story was okay. nice ending. But it kind of meanders a bit.

  4. The outcome of divorce part two

    genderbunny's Buddy Icon genderbunny

    Posted 10 months ago

    1.0 out of 5 stars

    This was an awful long way to say “Hey guys, I found religion.”

    As with the first part, this could have been a decent story had the spelling and grammar been better, and had you introduced the metaphor of “bags” in a way that didn’t leave us guessing at what you were referring to.

    And this is just me nitpicking, but I feel that an ellipsis is best used sparingly.

  5. The outcome of divorce part two

    Storykeeper of Fae's Buddy Icon Storykeeper of Fae

    Posted 10 months ago

    1.0 out of 5 stars

    Memoirs are well and good…at least when they are well-written memoirs. Your metaphor was nice, but in the first one it was a bit confusing, you know? Nice attempt, but it could’ve been better. Sorry if this sounds mean, but perhaps you can just let it go like one of the bags?

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