ADD [what a twist challenge]

by Mistress Elsha Hawk

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The doctor put down the pen he had been jotting with on a chart and said, “So, tell me, what brings you here?”
I hesitated, but he looked sincere and ready to listen so….
“I’ve been a little tired, lazy, and my leg was tingly the other night which reminds of that restless leg syndrome commercial. You know? I thought that commercial was fake the first time I saw it! I thought the little Energizer bunny would go pounding across the screen! I’ve always wondered why he was pink. I mean the bunny is strong, males are strong, but it’s pink, so is it a girl? My sister is a girl, but she doesn’t like pink at all, she likes lilac, and mint green. Reminds me of irises in my grandmother’s flower bed. My Grandmother, God Rest Her Soul, was great with flowers! But she hated chicken! She used to have to kill and pluck her own dinner on the farm! After doing that once I’d never want to eat chicken again!”
“Roger…”
“But turkey, mmm, I do love a good…”
“Roger!”
“Yes?”
“I meant what is wrong with your dog, I’m the vet!”

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  1. ADD [what a twist challenge]

    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 8 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Did not see the twist coming. And can I use that monologue? It’s a great example of what we refer to at work as “tangential”, usually seen as evidence of either acute mania or a thought disorder.
    LoA

  2. ADD [what a twist challenge]

    flute faerie's Buddy Icon flute faerie

    Posted 8 months ago

    Wowzers, didn’t see that. That was hilarious though. Good job!

  3. ADD [what a twist challenge]

    Jamie Rose's Buddy Icon Jamie Rose

    Posted 15 days ago

    Haha! I never guessed the vet part! Very good. Thanks for entering!

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